Post by War Planets on Oct 22, 2015 1:25:08 GMT
This is your friendly neighborhood War Planets here. This Thread is to support TM93's work and the advancement of the system, not to bash or insult any of the work in it. If you have a suggestion to add/remove/change something or its functionality, please create a different Thread for that.
Now to the point: I just read every single word in the handbook, the October 2015 version. I have discovered just a few typos, formatting errors, and a few things that need to be expounded on or defined. Some of this is just personal preference to sentence/paragraph order or structure.
So lets get underway:
1) The page numbers in the Table of Contents (ToC) are off by 1 starting in Chapter 4: Combat, which starts on page 32 though the ToC says page 31.
2) Page 8 paragraphs 6 and 7 should be swapt to explain what Torment Boxes are before explaining how to mark them off.
3) Page 9 Define TN here when it is first used instead of page 25.
4) Page 9 Sanity Drain is not explained at all. (I do believe it is discussed in another Thread).
5) Page 12 'Area Attack' - 'Line' line 3 should read "The line's width is 1 at base".
6) Page 12 'Area Attack' - 'Pass' line 3 should read "'through' enemies and may continue to make".
7) Page 12 'Agility' Agility and Dodge don't seem like the "soak even the hardest of attacks." kind of things, they seem more like the "avoid damage" traits.
8) Page 20 Burst Power: what are the costs of using Burst Power, what are the limitations, how often can it be used, what are the consequences if it lasts longer than 6 rounds?
9) Page 34 3rd paragraph under 'Attacks and Damage' the 1st sentence ends abbruptly and seems like it should almost be combined with the 2nd sentence to read "Whenever you or an opponent is targeted by multiple attack actions in the same round, the target takes a -1 die penalty to its Dodge pool for each attack past the first, this penalty DOES stack. This penalty disappears and resets a the beginning of the target's next turn."
10) Page 38 The header read "Tanmers in Combat" instead of "Tamers in Combat".
11) Page 45 Section 4 should read "4. What are the physical...."
a) Throughout the book there are several awkward gaps in paragraphs and sentences where they do not go to the end of the line, it could just be the formatting and cannot be fixed. Page 3 paragraph 3, page 5 top right paragraph, page 7 3rd paragraph in the right column, page 8 2nd paragraph on the right, page 10 1st paragraph, page 12 'Suggestion' paragraph, page 15 under 'Holy Ring', page 17 first paragraph, page 22 paragraph 2, page 25 paragraphs 3-5, page 27 paragraphs 1 ad 3, page 28 paragraph 2, page 30 paragraphs 1, 5, and 6, page 31 paragraph 1, page 34 paragraphs 1, 4, and 6, page 35 paragraph 3, page 36 rightside sections 'Heal', 'Lifedrain', and 'Stregthen', page 44 paragraphs 1 and 2, page 46 'Life and Death' paragraph, page 47 paragraph 2, page 48 paragraph 5, page 50 'Storage Digivice' section, page 53 paragraph 4 'Symbolism...'
This might not be an extensive list, I may have missed a few things in some of the sub-sections, but I think I got at least all of the non-format errors.
Now to the point: I just read every single word in the handbook, the October 2015 version. I have discovered just a few typos, formatting errors, and a few things that need to be expounded on or defined. Some of this is just personal preference to sentence/paragraph order or structure.
So lets get underway:
1) The page numbers in the Table of Contents (ToC) are off by 1 starting in Chapter 4: Combat, which starts on page 32 though the ToC says page 31.
2) Page 8 paragraphs 6 and 7 should be swapt to explain what Torment Boxes are before explaining how to mark them off.
3) Page 9 Define TN here when it is first used instead of page 25.
4) Page 9 Sanity Drain is not explained at all. (I do believe it is discussed in another Thread).
5) Page 12 'Area Attack' - 'Line' line 3 should read "The line's width is 1 at base".
6) Page 12 'Area Attack' - 'Pass' line 3 should read "'through' enemies and may continue to make".
7) Page 12 'Agility' Agility and Dodge don't seem like the "soak even the hardest of attacks." kind of things, they seem more like the "avoid damage" traits.
8) Page 20 Burst Power: what are the costs of using Burst Power, what are the limitations, how often can it be used, what are the consequences if it lasts longer than 6 rounds?
9) Page 34 3rd paragraph under 'Attacks and Damage' the 1st sentence ends abbruptly and seems like it should almost be combined with the 2nd sentence to read "Whenever you or an opponent is targeted by multiple attack actions in the same round, the target takes a -1 die penalty to its Dodge pool for each attack past the first, this penalty DOES stack. This penalty disappears and resets a the beginning of the target's next turn."
10) Page 38 The header read "Tanmers in Combat" instead of "Tamers in Combat".
11) Page 45 Section 4 should read "4. What are the physical...."
a) Throughout the book there are several awkward gaps in paragraphs and sentences where they do not go to the end of the line, it could just be the formatting and cannot be fixed. Page 3 paragraph 3, page 5 top right paragraph, page 7 3rd paragraph in the right column, page 8 2nd paragraph on the right, page 10 1st paragraph, page 12 'Suggestion' paragraph, page 15 under 'Holy Ring', page 17 first paragraph, page 22 paragraph 2, page 25 paragraphs 3-5, page 27 paragraphs 1 ad 3, page 28 paragraph 2, page 30 paragraphs 1, 5, and 6, page 31 paragraph 1, page 34 paragraphs 1, 4, and 6, page 35 paragraph 3, page 36 rightside sections 'Heal', 'Lifedrain', and 'Stregthen', page 44 paragraphs 1 and 2, page 46 'Life and Death' paragraph, page 47 paragraph 2, page 48 paragraph 5, page 50 'Storage Digivice' section, page 53 paragraph 4 'Symbolism...'
This might not be an extensive list, I may have missed a few things in some of the sub-sections, but I think I got at least all of the non-format errors.